04-28-2016, 12:35 PM
My aunt Lottie lived to be one hundred and two,
she drank her coffee as watery Wistful, it is, yes, and it shows a fine appreciation and regard for the aunt.
as the eyes of some of her friends, I like very much the comparison of coffee to the watery eyes, I think, though,
or the amount of oil to salt water you could leave it with that, the reference to oil somehow drags it out and weakens it. we were getting when we finally I think yoiu could use the oil to salt water image in another way.
closed downed the oil leases, (I left town and moved far away when we started getting too much salt water
precipitating me to leave town in our oil, causing us to shut down the wells)
and move far away.
The next time I saw her,
was some years later.
She met me at the door unafraid,
(Thank god they'd taken her guns away) You could get more humor out of his gun sequence somehow - She didn't have her six-shooters
telling me she knew what I wanted, on her when she came to the door (my dad had convinced her to hang 'em up) or something and that she was dialing 911. in that vein.
She had been my favorite aunt,
my only aunt really.
She used to come and take me
to the "Corner Drug Store"
and buy me tuna fish sandwiches I like the feel of this, but somehow I want you to get closer to the aunt, more familiar.
on toasted bread and a coke
mixed the old fashioned way,
but just like the Easter Bunny, I also think you could break it up into 2 or 3 stanzas. Hope this helps some
These Things Pass.