First poem

First poem

KittyL
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04-27-2016, 12:29 PM

This is a nicely written piece. Only major thing I noticed was "Perhaps I'm wrong your just grasping for stars", your should be you're, and a comma between wrong and you're would be beneficial to the rhythm Wink

~s.a

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First poem - by Beyond all Lines - 03-30-2016, 10:21 AM

RE: First poem - by 1skylande1 - 03-30-2016, 11:53 AM

RE: First poem - by jmmc137 - 03-30-2016, 12:37 PM

RE: First poem - by UselessBlueprint - 03-30-2016, 02:06 PM

RE: First poem - by Erthona - 03-31-2016, 06:45 AM

RE: First poem - by Queerventions - 04-03-2016, 06:08 PM

RE: First poem - by homer1950 - 04-18-2016, 12:00 PM

RE: First poem - by Seanharvey - 04-19-2016, 02:25 PM

RE: First poem - by KittyL - 04-27-2016, 12:29 PM

RE: First poem - by humility - 04-27-2016, 11:41 PM

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