04-27-2016, 12:16 PM
I will start by saying that I thoroughly enjoyed this poem.
I'm new to critiquing, and some of my points were mentioned already, but something I felt was in the last two lines, the rythym didn't quite match the rest of the poem. They seemed clipped, like they were missing a beat. Now, in many poems, this would not matter at all, but this one has such a defined rythym that I thought it worth pointing out.
Just a thought.
~s.a.
I'm new to critiquing, and some of my points were mentioned already, but something I felt was in the last two lines, the rythym didn't quite match the rest of the poem. They seemed clipped, like they were missing a beat. Now, in many poems, this would not matter at all, but this one has such a defined rythym that I thought it worth pointing out.
Just a thought.
~s.a.