04-25-2016, 10:03 PM
I got bothered with L'Etoile -- though reading it, I think it sort of produced the effect I was going for, I guess it was just a little too woozy and pointless to make for a good one. Here's an attempt at making it better:
THE GREAT UNREACHABLE
To the fox, those grapes
he could not reach
seemed
to become some other fruit -- nightshade,
perhaps, only enough
to quiet the grumbling child.
He tried to leave, naturally,
first wishing upon the distant star
that some ready ship would come and take him,
then having the haunch of farmer's rabbit
bloat his small stomach,
but already
the trellis
had become a noose, Venus
herself a morning
consumed by the coming sun.
The true lesson is
wishing upon a star
ties you to its course.
THE GREAT UNREACHABLE
To the fox, those grapes
he could not reach
seemed
to become some other fruit -- nightshade,
perhaps, only enough
to quiet the grumbling child.
He tried to leave, naturally,
first wishing upon the distant star
that some ready ship would come and take him,
then having the haunch of farmer's rabbit
bloat his small stomach,
but already
the trellis
had become a noose, Venus
herself a morning
consumed by the coming sun.
The true lesson is
wishing upon a star
ties you to its course.