One Second Later

[Achebe]

Hi Matt. The part before 'and yet' is nice. I liked the idea of rain 'shattering' against steel. Billy's already pointed out how the first 'sometimes' is not needed (not just that, it's confusing).
The part after 'yet' sounds a bit nonsensical, to be frank. It's too cryptic.
It's also not clear to me how all that relates to rain.
Good luck.