04-22-2016, 04:22 AM
Liking the revision a lot. Insomniacal still irks me a bit, both because its length mucks up the meter when I read it aloud and also for that harsh "c" sound, which draws attention away from those haunting "w"s and lovely long vowels.
On writing something inspired by another: you'll see that a lot here and I'd definitely encourage it. That's the beauty of true community -- inspiration increases exponentially.
On writing something inspired by another: you'll see that a lot here and I'd definitely encourage it. That's the beauty of true community -- inspiration increases exponentially.
It could be worse