04-21-2016, 02:08 PM
@bedeep: Thank you for the reflective walkthrough. The working out of your reaction is as valuable as the reaction itself. I'll use your comments when I sit down to revise. Thank you.
@Mercedes: Thanks for the read and comments. I can see some ways I can restrain my inner need for the simile. If I don't end up doing major surgery I could likely easily adjust out the first two instances. Appreciate it.
@Melissa: Thanks for the insomniac note. I'll give it some thought. It usually means going a bit deeper on the first draft. Thank you (and welcome to the site!).
@Achebe: Thanks for the read and comments. I'll note your take on the insomniacs and the trees and give it some thought. Thank you.
@Mercedes: Thanks for the read and comments. I can see some ways I can restrain my inner need for the simile. If I don't end up doing major surgery I could likely easily adjust out the first two instances. Appreciate it.
@Melissa: Thanks for the insomniac note. I'll give it some thought. It usually means going a bit deeper on the first draft. Thank you (and welcome to the site!).
@Achebe: Thanks for the read and comments. I'll note your take on the insomniacs and the trees and give it some thought. Thank you.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson