04-21-2016, 09:45 AM
'Seem like insomniancs' is a dull line.
Why would the trees be bare of leaves? It's possible that the trees are dead, but it's distracting for the reader.
'The dry light of the forest' is gorgeous. You could almost be hiking in the Australian bush in summer
Why would the trees be bare of leaves? It's possible that the trees are dead, but it's distracting for the reader.
'The dry light of the forest' is gorgeous. You could almost be hiking in the Australian bush in summer
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe