On Having Lost Natalie

[ellajam]

I'm not opposed to work shopping it, just slightly terrified. I've read some of the critiques and I'm afraid that much of it is over my head.

The sudden breakout into soft eternal was splendid
I don't think you need to post it in Serious, but do repost it in mild in the next iteration.

Members giving critique certainly have a lot more leeway in Mild than Novice, and you may get what you need, it can be moved there if you'd like.

As far as Serious goes, jumping into the deep end of anything for the first time is exhilarating as well as terrifying and leads to a new level of of expertise once you get used to it. The great thing here is when I don't quite get what someone is telling me I can discuss it on the thread until I do understand what they mean. Great way to learn.

Take your pick, or stay here, where members can only hint. It's up to you.