Touch

[laltieri0]

Yes, this commits one of those basic poetry crimes and is about love, but is it at all interesting to the reader anyway?

Title: Touch

I fail to ASTOUND you Why is this capitalized? same question for LIFETIME.
but my words still pour forth this could be interesting, but I'm looking for a more concrete image.
as a LIFETIME can exist
      in the space The architecture here is strong
between your eyes and mine.
I am a mendicant of love try something other than mendicant
hands scarred in stigmata of passion, I like this idea, but am struggling with how it's phrased.
drinking from this cup, bitter and sweet,   I'm not sure how this fits in with the rest of what you're saying, and it's a bit tired.
these hands creating music they were scarred, now they're making music... incongruity
to avoid reaching for that which they will never hold;  ambiguous
I can make love without touching -- beautiful!
keep smiling
      laugh I pray I don't see the strength in spacing here that L4 had

The last three lines make this poem for me.  "I can make love without touching--" consider elaborating on that line and rewriting the poem around that idea.