First poem

[Seanharvey]

I was a little put off by your use of "t'ward" not once but twice. Also why "thither?" Just seems like an odd use of semi-archaic language. To me it comes across as pretense. Kind of like you're trying to recreate a Coleridge or Wordsworth poem you had to study in school. Also, how is the tree growing equated to working "t'ward" an early grave? Are you saying that everything that's living is also dying at the same time. Doesn't seem like that needs to be said.