Sweat

[ellajam]

Hi, welcome to the Pen. You might want to reconsider your choice of breaks. For me, dropping both "the" and "or" to the lines below would leave slow brew and parting lips, which appeals to me.

I'm having a bit of trouble with porcelain, which brings to mind white or transluscent, both difficult for me to picture with lips.

A nice morning feel.

Seventy degrees don't slow the

drip of morning's brew or

deter my tongue from parting

her porcelain lips.