04-17-2016, 10:10 PM
I had previously posted this under "novice". However, I'd like to seriously work on improving this piece and learning more.
A thread so soft,
smooth,
gentle,
coy;
unraveled.
Bit by bit,
fiber upon fiber
of velvety decadence.
A gush took it over
of the wind; disheveled.
With it modesty,
animosity, affections,
passionately fluttered.
On the ground then
I saw what was left,
unraveled
uninhibited;
undone.
Original
A thread so soft
smooth
gentle
coy;
unraveled.
Bit by bit,
fiber upon fiber
of velvety decadence.
A gush took it over
of the wind; disheveled.
With it modesty,
animosity, affections
passionately, fluttered.
On the ground then
I saw what was left,
unraveled
uninhibited;
undone.
Threads merged/mod
Thread closed as the OP states they are abandoning this piece./admin
A thread so soft,
smooth,
gentle,
coy;
unraveled.
Bit by bit,
fiber upon fiber
of velvety decadence.
A gush took it over
of the wind; disheveled.
With it modesty,
animosity, affections,
passionately fluttered.
On the ground then
I saw what was left,
unraveled
uninhibited;
undone.
Original
A thread so soft
smooth
gentle
coy;
unraveled.
Bit by bit,
fiber upon fiber
of velvety decadence.
A gush took it over
of the wind; disheveled.
With it modesty,
animosity, affections
passionately, fluttered.
On the ground then
I saw what was left,
unraveled
uninhibited;
undone.
Threads merged/mod
Thread closed as the OP states they are abandoning this piece./admin