Daliesque

[Aidoneus]

I thouroughly enjoyed the imagery in this poem and it was very gripping. The only critique I have which I feel has already been addressed is the line breaks. I don't think the choppinness at the beginning is necessarily a problem, but it becomes when when you start having longer lines later on. I think this creates an unintentional change in the way the poem is read. However if you meant for that to happen, then please disregard.