04-17-2016, 10:30 AM
The thing I found most enjoyable about this piece was your confident voice. Many writers find it difficult to come up with their own unique tone out of fear of rejection. You said what you had to say with a sort of coarse humor, but it was ironically eloquent in a way. I really got a smile out of the last stanza. Right now I can't see any glaring problems, as the imagery was very strong throughout and the entire thing flowed throughout; something I have a problem with.