No Vacancy

[LunaDeLore]

Loneliness owns everything,
in the hearts of crippled men.  
Walking down the path of fools,
back through what could have been. ------- I like this illustration of rehashing the past and how hopeless doing so is.
Every word unspoken, ------------ maybe here you could consider " every word left unspoken"
an indictment from on high.
No consolation to be found, ------ to be or not to be, isn't that the question here? Why not go with "No consolation found" dropping to be.
in understanding why.
Of course you know it's all your fault, ----- I'm not sure if I like the use of a contraction here or not. I'm thinking: of course you know it is your fault
there's no one else to blame.
The guilt is yours alone to bare, -------- not sure if alone enhances this line or not, you could possibly consider omitting it
as is the crushing shame.
The others used to come around,  ------ this is where the poem takes a major turn for me and I'm not sure if works..
and you felt more alone.  
They might not have wasted their time, ---- maybe, maybe you could go with  "their time may not be wasted, if only they had known"
had any of them known.
All the things you could have done,
the changes that weren't made.
The friends that left you far behind,
the bitterness that stayed.
All the chances you won't take,
so certain you can't win.
Loneliness owns everything,
in the hearts of crippled men.

Tony,

I think you have a foundation with this poem to build on. The message is one, I'm sure many people can relate to: regrets, loneliness, a need for change, and especially self blame. And I see where you say that cripple man cuts off the hands of others who try to help; that happens often. Anyway, I hope you consider some of my suggestions when revisiting this poem.

Luna