Sonnet #3: Lives lived in vain

[billy]

hi taratica.

good to see you take the feedback about abstract words to heart.
what makes this a great sonnet is the fact you attempted a sonnet. that said it is the attempt that's great and not the sonnet itself. the good thing is that most poems can improve with edits. it's the reason for the site. it's obvious what the poem is about, no need for hints unless you think it may be to ambiguous.

the title works well enough

use some poetic devices in the poem, alliteration, consonance, assonance to name three. use a few metaphors or similes; they create imagery they can be found here if you were watching these atrocities on the news what would you be seeing, show us what you see not what they said.

Hi there!

This is my first upload of a poem. I would like some strong criticism, please. It is supposed to be a sonnet. The title is a work in progress. It is about indiscriminate terrorism and extremism.

Sonnet #3: Lives lived in vain

What kind of monster has such a blatant,
Indiscriminate disregard for life?
Why is this world so plagued by violent
And viscous ideologies of strife?

How can these vile villains eliminate
Scores of innocents, young and old alike,
In the name of dogma, justice and fate?
How can they justify each fatal strike?

We have to believe that these beasts are few
And that lives spent in fear are lived in vain.
We cannot succumb to a bleak world view
Where our hearts are ruled by hatred and pain. watch out for cliches they kill most poems

Our hearts ache for those afflicted by grief
And in fellowship we find some relief.