04-15-2016, 04:43 AM
(04-15-2016, 03:41 AM)LunaDeLore Wrote:This is priceless.(03-25-2016, 12:26 PM)Leanne Wrote: "I just want my poems viewed." ----> do you really want your poems viewed or do you want them read?
MOD: Read your welcome letter
"Worship all my poetry." -----> wouldn't "worship my poetry" include it "all"
MOD: Read your welcome letter
"I'll go elsewhere, you've lost me."
MOD: Thank fuck. Now, cake and tea? ----> doesn't thank need and "s" & would you like some cake and tea?
This poem reminds me of poems I write when I'm in an especially good mood. Or at least feeling playful. However, even the most fun reads and writes require just a bit of elbow grease or a little polish. Hope you find my suggestions helpful.
Luna

