Let me save you some time
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(04-15-2016, 03:41 AM)LunaDeLore Wrote:  
(03-25-2016, 12:26 PM)Leanne Wrote:  "I just want my poems viewed."  ----> do you really want your poems viewed or do you want them read?

MOD: Read your welcome letter

"Worship all my poetry."  ----->  wouldn't "worship my poetry" include it "all"

MOD: Read your welcome letter

"I'll go elsewhere, you've lost me."

MOD: Thank fuck.  Now, cake and tea? ----> doesn't thank need and "s" & would you like some cake and tea?

This poem reminds me of poems I write when I'm in an especially good mood. Or at least feeling playful. However, even the most fun reads and writes require just a bit of elbow grease or a little polish. Hope you find my suggestions helpful.

Luna
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Messages In This Thread
Let me save you some time - by Leanne - 03-25-2016, 12:26 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by RiverNotch - 03-25-2016, 01:50 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by just mercedes - 03-25-2016, 04:48 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by billy - 03-25-2016, 05:01 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by Achebe - 03-25-2016, 05:11 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by billy - 03-25-2016, 05:15 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by ellajam - 03-25-2016, 05:49 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by RiverNotch - 03-25-2016, 07:00 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by ellajam - 03-25-2016, 07:11 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by RiverNotch - 03-25-2016, 08:38 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by Leanne - 03-26-2016, 05:32 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by milo - 03-26-2016, 05:56 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by ellajam - 03-26-2016, 05:59 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by Leanne - 03-26-2016, 06:04 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by ellajam - 03-26-2016, 06:32 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by Leanne - 03-26-2016, 06:40 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by ellajam - 03-26-2016, 07:12 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by Leanne - 03-26-2016, 07:17 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by RiverNotch - 03-26-2016, 02:24 PM
RE: Let me save you some time - by ellajam - 03-26-2016, 07:19 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by Leanne - 03-26-2016, 07:24 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by LunaDeLore - 04-15-2016, 03:41 AM
RE: Let me save you some time - by milo - 04-15-2016, 04:43 AM



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