From tenements to sun dance lodge

[Keith]

Keith,

Futures crackle like silver foil -----> someone said to me "why not 'as' instead of like" and could this be true here
blackened by their underbelly,
furs traded for faeces and friends ----> unique combination, not one I'm accustomed too.
at an altar from a grazing skull. -----> an alter from a grazing skull or "of " a grazing skull ?

Push the bone through fast,
tether me with twisted ropes
of flesh, reborn beside this death.
I will see inside the smoke -----> I must admit, this is a good strophe but the use of "I" is somewhat daunting. Why not " to see inside the smoke."
and tear the skewers fresh.

Feathered with the breeze
to mend with medicated traits-----> Why medicated traits? Wouldn't something like "antiseptic" work better.  
of men, that spirit high above
the trees and only ask respect
of creatures on their knees.


The title really caught my eye but I can't say that I expected the content to be flesh baring (smiles and winks)....And I do hope you consider some of the suggestions I've made in critique.

Many thanks LDL much appreciated I will have a look at what fits for the edit much appreciated, I was thinking more methadone than antiseptic and almost having to beg for it. Thanks again for the help. Keith