04-13-2016, 07:58 AM
i found you feedback shite[paraphrasing]..... it's not nice to see someone write such a thing is it? just comment on the poem, if you want to comment on someone's feedback do so in the pig's arse of the poetry discussion forum; further comments along a similar line will be deleted/mod
I enjoyed reading your poem. I find nothing wrong with it. Unlike Erthona who thought the metaphor "hands scarred in passion" is nonsensical, I like the image. Too much passion has been known to be hurtful, but the metaphor might work a little better if you elaborated it by offering an example or two to help readers understand the reasons why your hands, and not your heart, were scarred by passion.
Nice work!
I enjoyed reading your poem. I find nothing wrong with it. Unlike Erthona who thought the metaphor "hands scarred in passion" is nonsensical, I like the image. Too much passion has been known to be hurtful, but the metaphor might work a little better if you elaborated it by offering an example or two to help readers understand the reasons why your hands, and not your heart, were scarred by passion.
Nice work!