04-13-2016, 01:49 AM
Hi there!
This is my first upload of a poem. I would like some strong criticism, please. It is supposed to be a sonnet. The title is a work in progress. It is about indiscriminate terrorism and extremism.
Sonnet #3: Lives lived in vain
What kind of monster has such a blatant,
Indiscriminate disregard for life?
Why is this world so plagued by violent
And viscous ideologies of strife?
How can these vile villains eliminate
Scores of innocents, young and old alike,
In the name of dogma, justice and fate?
How can they justify each fatal strike?
We have to believe that these beasts are few
And that lives spent in fear are lived in vain.
We cannot succumb to a bleak world view
Where our hearts are ruled by hatred and pain.
Our hearts ache for those afflicted by grief
And in fellowship we find some relief.
This is my first upload of a poem. I would like some strong criticism, please. It is supposed to be a sonnet. The title is a work in progress. It is about indiscriminate terrorism and extremism.
Sonnet #3: Lives lived in vain
What kind of monster has such a blatant,
Indiscriminate disregard for life?
Why is this world so plagued by violent
And viscous ideologies of strife?
How can these vile villains eliminate
Scores of innocents, young and old alike,
In the name of dogma, justice and fate?
How can they justify each fatal strike?
We have to believe that these beasts are few
And that lives spent in fear are lived in vain.
We cannot succumb to a bleak world view
Where our hearts are ruled by hatred and pain.
Our hearts ache for those afflicted by grief
And in fellowship we find some relief.
He who hesitates is lost!