04-12-2016, 12:19 AM
Hi,
I'm new to this form.
I read your poem and I like it.
But I was thinking that to me it looks more like "thinking out loud" and self talking.
Which is not a bad idea for catharsis but a poem should give the feel of a poem. If this can be tightened up a little, it would be a great poem, IMO.
take care.
I'm new to this form.
I read your poem and I like it.
But I was thinking that to me it looks more like "thinking out loud" and self talking.
Which is not a bad idea for catharsis but a poem should give the feel of a poem. If this can be tightened up a little, it would be a great poem, IMO.
take care.