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I'm leaving you
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04-09-2016, 06:05 AM
The first part of the poem is fantastic. It really set the stage. The second half kind of jumped all over the place and died off from its purpose. We understand where your coming from in this one just make it continue to flow with that intensity from the first half. Well done otherwise. Thank you.
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I'm leaving you - by DC Black - 03-18-2016, 09:59 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by DerTomatenToaster - 03-18-2016, 10:43 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Achebe - 03-19-2016, 10:54 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by The Raven - 03-20-2016, 10:32 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Erthona - 03-20-2016, 01:45 PM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Nester - 03-22-2016, 07:39 PM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Matthew McKeown - 03-25-2016, 08:36 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Mr.Malicious - 03-27-2016, 02:13 PM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Jasper - 03-28-2016, 03:22 PM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Acephale - 03-29-2016, 01:35 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Todd - 03-29-2016, 03:52 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Beyond all Lines - 03-29-2016, 11:02 PM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Uncle Tony - 04-04-2016, 08:17 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by timg516 - 04-09-2016, 06:05 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by DC Black - 04-09-2016, 08:52 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Desrei - 04-09-2016, 09:08 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by taratica - 04-12-2016, 09:21 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by babymonkey - 04-13-2016, 08:44 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Rogo - 04-15-2016, 03:51 AM
RE: I'm leaving you - by Shrewbe - 04-17-2016, 07:22 PM
RE: I'm leaving you - by laltieri0 - 04-18-2016, 02:09 AM
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