Touch
#3
Thanks for the critique. I was kind of afraid it was falling flat. Originally this was a much longer poem but it got reduced down over days of editing and this is kind of the essential core, and perhaps it's a bit weak and cliched even after all that. I was just hoping maybe it gave some feeling of passion, but sounds like it may be lackluster.
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Touch - by jeh - 04-07-2016, 08:20 PM
RE: Touch - by Todd - 04-08-2016, 04:58 AM
RE: Touch - by jeh - 04-08-2016, 07:56 AM
RE: Touch - by Erthona - 04-12-2016, 06:14 AM
RE: Touch - by bluerain_ - 04-12-2016, 11:26 AM
RE: Touch - by homer1950 - 04-12-2016, 04:40 PM
RE: Touch - by babymonkey - 04-13-2016, 07:58 AM
RE: Touch - by shaan - 04-14-2016, 10:39 PM
RE: Touch - by Seanharvey - 04-19-2016, 02:49 PM
RE: Touch - by laltieri0 - 04-19-2016, 07:42 PM
RE: Touch - by IgorSShute - 04-23-2016, 06:23 PM



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