Time (moved from Mild to Fun)

[Achebe]

There's not much meat in the poem for the critic to digest and feed back. Suggest you employ a formal structure with a defined meter and rhyme scheme and repost it for more meaningful crit.

The poem was not meant to be "meaty," rather it was a short rhyme, whimsically written - not intended to take the reader to a "deep place," but simply to make him/her if not laugh out loud, at least smile.  No formal structure, schemes, or defined meters required when the desired response is no more than a grin. 

You posted it in 'Mild Critique', which implies that you're asking for feedback. The feedback that I'm giving you is that there's nothing to give feedback on. If your defence is that your poem isn't actually worth critiquing (I don't think it's worth reading as it stands, actually), then perhaps you should post it in a different forum.