04-05-2016, 05:50 PM
hi uncle
sounds like a nursery rhyme which doesn't mean it's bad, the last line feels a bit shaky. em is usually a short version of them, i'd think it or 'im would read better.
as for the content. for me it's not the strongest of poems as it doesn't say much.
sounds like a nursery rhyme which doesn't mean it's bad, the last line feels a bit shaky. em is usually a short version of them, i'd think it or 'im would read better.
as for the content. for me it's not the strongest of poems as it doesn't say much.