Adam and Eve

[Matthew McKeown]

Hi Acephale,

I liked this piece very much- thanks for the enjoyable read.

Some have suggested that you could go smaller cleaner. I would like to suggest you go bigger more epic! Full blown wind swept novel style (lol)

Here is a small example of what I mean:

Once, we were closer,
In a magnificent garden
It was there, Adam first loved Eve,

A wonderous land,
Where Adam's passion was formed and shaped,
Formed and shaped;
From His very own Flesh and Bone

I just thought, perhaps your work would enjoy a more theatrical platform.

Thanks, Matt