04-01-2016, 02:51 PM
And maybe I’m just scared
Scared that if I open myself up, tear myself open,
this emptiness inside me would become what completely defines me
Hi, Welcome to the site! I have one piece of advice for you. These lines above are your idea not your poem. You need to figure out a way to express this idea figuratively. Don't directly spell it out. Think of a way to describe this with an image and carry that idea through the poem. Does that make sense?
I think it will help the poem. I hope it does.
Best,
Todd
Scared that if I open myself up, tear myself open,
this emptiness inside me would become what completely defines me
Hi, Welcome to the site! I have one piece of advice for you. These lines above are your idea not your poem. You need to figure out a way to express this idea figuratively. Don't directly spell it out. Think of a way to describe this with an image and carry that idea through the poem. Does that make sense?
I think it will help the poem. I hope it does.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson