American Beauties

[whatisay-whatifeel]

One spring the city we lived in was sex,
caught heat in cool, rainy weather

we slept next to a radiator by a window
on the east side

it was our slice of space: damp sheets,
crepe-like wallpaper, orange and yellow

For one whole season, you left your vagina- Can this line be stronger? Disrupts the flow of the poem.
where I could find it

Later, you thanked me, but explained
there’d been a change in our story

and you left just after all the American Beauties
broke their first blossoms

I love everything about this poem. I how how its simplicity is what makes it raw and unnerving. I love how you chose few, yet very impactful words to tell a story that still allows the reader to fill in the blanks, constructing a whole relationship and lives  of those narorated to us. This poem is relatable and raw, not sugarcoating the death of a relationship as pure romantics might do. The only change I would consider is to look over the line "for one whole season, you left you vagina." This line ruined the flow of the poem for me and just seemed a little oddly placed or "off" (for the lack of a better word). Amazing job.