03-31-2016, 03:33 AM
Thanks to the replies. From what I'm seeing the poem is working as intended. A couple of the suggestions have been noted and will probably be implemented.
Thanks, Teagan, for your extended comments concerning the title. I'm glad you are catching the nuances that may or may not be there. I did re-watch the movie a while ago. It's classic. Would disagree with your "...it's about a girl's emerging sexuality" but would agree w/ "...among other things..." To me the movie is about living the American Lie. Everyone in the movie was a liar. When Lester finally does the one and only decent thing he's ever done (not do the deed w/the daughter's friend), he's killed by the neighbor. So, yeah, there is a nod to the movie in this poem and I'm glad you brought it up. Thank you.
Changing the first line into a grammatically correct sentence spoils the action, I think. You see, the whole poem starts out lying to the reader.
All comments are appreciated. Thank you.
71degrees
Thanks, Teagan, for your extended comments concerning the title. I'm glad you are catching the nuances that may or may not be there. I did re-watch the movie a while ago. It's classic. Would disagree with your "...it's about a girl's emerging sexuality" but would agree w/ "...among other things..." To me the movie is about living the American Lie. Everyone in the movie was a liar. When Lester finally does the one and only decent thing he's ever done (not do the deed w/the daughter's friend), he's killed by the neighbor. So, yeah, there is a nod to the movie in this poem and I'm glad you brought it up. Thank you.
Changing the first line into a grammatically correct sentence spoils the action, I think. You see, the whole poem starts out lying to the reader.
All comments are appreciated. Thank you.
71degrees