Art Exam

[Keith]

More like prose lined out like poetry, but in this section completely acceptable, evidently even more so than the drawing as far as the " two teachers"...and "external moderator". According to whom art in a box is still art. As I am from the US, the term  'O' Level Art, holds little meaning for me, but I guess nature would qualify, although I don't see the "fine point", more of a broad broad brush stroke to me.

dale

Thanks Dale yes its very prosey, O level art or Art exam ive changed it to remove confusion. the finer point as you so eloquently put it, only really comes at the end. Thanks for reading and commenting much appreciated. Keith

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I sort of agree that this reads more like prose, but I think that there are just some pieces of prose you can't help but write in lines, and lines don't really define the poem. But it's a good story, an enlightening one -- I don't really know what O level art is, but examining Google Images, it feels like one of those silly classifications you make for a curriculum's convenience -- nonexistent, probably should be ignored in special cases, of which this seems to be one. I'd say the device of the recurrent "O's" needs a bit more emphasis, the rhymes a bit more, er, everpresent, and the imagery a bit more, er, imagey, for this to be poetry -- or just ignore the lineation altogether, focus on making these better paragraphs, and then it'd be poetry? Honestly, though this feels very much like prose broken up, just as some bits of prose feel more like poetry said straight, I'm still not concrete about that great divide -- if it exists at all, which according to a few discerning critics, it sort of doesn't?

Thanks for taking time to read and comment RiverNotch, I think more prose to but hey you give me some good advice there to bring in a few more poetic devices, so I will have a think. Much appreciated. Keith