03-30-2016, 11:11 PM
I sort of agree that this reads more like prose, but I think that there are just some pieces of prose you can't help but write in lines, and lines don't really define the poem. But it's a good story, an enlightening one -- I don't really know what O level art is, but examining Google Images, it feels like one of those silly classifications you make for a curriculum's convenience -- nonexistent, probably should be ignored in special cases, of which this seems to be one. I'd say the device of the recurrent "O's" needs a bit more emphasis, the rhymes a bit more, er, everpresent, and the imagery a bit more, er, imagey, for this to be poetry -- or just ignore the lineation altogether, focus on making these better paragraphs, and then it'd be poetry? Honestly, though this feels very much like prose broken up, just as some bits of prose feel more like poetry said straight, I'm still not concrete about that great divide -- if it exists at all, which according to a few discerning critics, it sort of doesn't?