I'm leaving you

[Beyond all Lines]

I'm leaving us my love,
my reckless entanglement,
my fucking mad, headlong descent
into today.
You swore we'd die entwined
in each other,                                                       
loving each other.
Give me a chance you said,
to prove my love, you said.
Ha! you had me there,
I didn't ever see this coming,
This cold, this freezing cold,
I'd have taken hatred any day.
Didn't I deserve that,
at least that?
Didn't I, my love?

 
I'm not 100% sure 'in' was the word you wanted to use in the 6th line, feels too sexual and out of place, simple replacement of 'with' could fix this.
The 'you said' could be removed just to improve rhythm, apart from that I think this shows some potential, just needs revising