I'm leaving you

[Jasper]

I'm leaving us my love,
my reckless entanglement,
my fucking mad, headlong descent
into today.
You swore we'd die entwined
in each other,
loving each other.
Give me a chance you said,
to prove my love, you said.
Ha! you had me there,
I didn't ever see this coming,
This cold, this freezing cold,
I'd have taken hatred any day.
Didn't I deserve that,
at least that?
Didn't I, my love?

I'm not sure I understand the first line, "I'm leaving us my love," because it seems a bit awkwardly phrased. The structure of the first three lines overall doesn't flow smoothly. This poem is predictable; I would suggest maybe using some more detailed imagery to enhance it. The ending doesn't strike me as the strongest. However, I did like how you put genuine emotion in this piece, I just think it needs to be refined.