03-28-2016, 09:24 AM
They hide
Under the bed
In the closet
For fear that the real monsters
Will turn on the light.
Revision one
Under the bed
and in the closet
Is where the scattered trace
of what humanity is left lies.
For they bring about their
guns, their gods, and their government.
These primal excuses of evolution
Ignore the truth that is
When the sun burns out the sky
Donald Trump will not be there for you.
Please put your original after the revision and note that it is the revision, so there is no confusion. I'm not sure about the large font size, but I would suggest reducing it also as it seems confusing. Thanks dale/mod
Under the bed
In the closet
For fear that the real monsters
Will turn on the light.
Revision one
Under the bed
and in the closet
Is where the scattered trace
of what humanity is left lies.
For they bring about their
guns, their gods, and their government.
These primal excuses of evolution
Ignore the truth that is
When the sun burns out the sky
Donald Trump will not be there for you.
Please put your original after the revision and note that it is the revision, so there is no confusion. I'm not sure about the large font size, but I would suggest reducing it also as it seems confusing. Thanks dale/mod
Love is evol.
Con is confidence.
Eros is sore.
Sin is sincere.
Con is confidence.
Eros is sore.
Sin is sincere.