Oh what a time to be alive. (SUGGESTIVE LANGUAGE?! not sure if it counts)

[Tiger the Lion]

Welcome Mr. M. I will try to get you started.

Before I start this freakshow lemme give you a bit of background on me, my writing, and cakepops. (not really, but that would be cool!)

So, I started writing about 4 weeks ago as a way to vent the troubles of my life, now before you say this is just going to be empty hate speech or anything of the like, I am going to describe multiple situations I am or have experience or experienced. My writing is kinda gonna take a macabre sorta direction, so gore/horror might be involved, recommend me a site or anything if it isn't really the type of thing that belongs here. But onto this horror of some sort.

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Oh what a time to be alive. why do you feel the "Oh" is needed? Don't worry about trying to create drama yet.
Consumerism fills the air yes, but this is not news - give us an example to relate to
those who have the most followers
rule this rock this is a nice line 
we all live on this line is weak. striking it makes the line above stronger

Oh what a time to be content. Say no to the Oh

Patriots
Riots
What even is the difference?
You see another nigga
I see another animal.


Oh, what a time to be alive.

The stench of religion drowns out
the aroma of cognizance.

Oh what a time to be fading.
All the gentlemen are dead
And the undead "gangstas"
Crawl from they're graves.

Oh what a time to be withering.
The hindered kindred of machines
programmed to listen to screens.

Oh what a time to be another machine.

I stopped rather than repeat myself, no comments on content for now. I don't want to overwhelm you if you're really only 4 weeks in. Angst poems are tough. Everyone has written one, even if it was just a rant on their facebook status. So the chances of saying something new and interesting is very difficult, even for very skilled writers. Having said that, I've read much worse. Just wanted to give you a few initial things to think about.
Paul