03-26-2016, 10:25 AM
I could identify a few objects from 'Persistence of memory' - namely the clock and the saddle, but not all.
The soup, for instance, or the teapot.
Might be a better idea to focus on a specific painting, otherwise the allusions are lost on all but the Dali expert.
EDIT: I didn't quite get the second stanza. If you couldn't get through the door, how did you throw the dude into the soup pot? It's there in 'Then I know what to do', but that doesn't explain a lot. Overall, I liked the story in the poem - I generally love the bizarre and bizarrely funny, which this piece is. If you work on making the transition from I to II less cryptic, I'd like it even more!
The soup, for instance, or the teapot.
Might be a better idea to focus on a specific painting, otherwise the allusions are lost on all but the Dali expert.
EDIT: I didn't quite get the second stanza. If you couldn't get through the door, how did you throw the dude into the soup pot? It's there in 'Then I know what to do', but that doesn't explain a lot. Overall, I liked the story in the poem - I generally love the bizarre and bizarrely funny, which this piece is. If you work on making the transition from I to II less cryptic, I'd like it even more!
~ I think I just quoted myself - Achebe