Daliesque

[Mattp]

'ello Casey, some thoughts:

first off I think you may want to re-visit where you've placed your lines breaks - as they are you're a little disconcerting. Example:

and there is tiny you
small as ginger root
on the cutting board
in My kitchen.

You've broken your phrase into little wee bits. This could be three lines. This could even be two.

I want to chop you up, but I can’t
get the friggin knife in the house past the handle;

Love to see you break this line at "up". As it stands it's a strange place to break the thought.

and I could smile again when silver reflected the
sun and it looked like love.

Breaking your first line after "silver" or "reflected" would work, but I don't think you're good ending with "the".

A few more thoughts:

Vapor screams anguish like a raging teapot
of the thousand times I died for you

What? Lost me.

I think you need to build on saddle a bit - as it stands its kinda coming out of left field.

Digging your work with the large knife - expanding into this notion of it not fitting through the door is a nice touch.

There's promise here. I look forward to reading more of yours. Hope this is helpful.

- Matt