Daliesque

[Nester]

Daliesque
 
I.
The knife is longer
than the whole damn street
and there is tiny you,                   (maybe add these 2 commas?)
small as ginger root,
on the cutting board
in My kitchen.                        (You don't need capital "My": this is good, strong verse on its own)
 
My pale Queen Kong hand
can barely fit through the door.     (maybe "barely fits through the door"?)
I want to chop you up, but I can’t
get the friggin knife in the house past the handle;             ("friggin" sounds out of place here)
the clock is bubbling on the stove.                     (how is the bubbling clock related to the knife?)
Vapor screams anguish like a raging teapot
of the thousand times I died for you.                 (this line could be stronger)
 
Then I know what to do.
 
II.
…The soup was delicious, everyone said so,               (comma)
as they dipped their spoons into the swimming pool    (perhaps "dipping their spoons"?)
where sorrow, hate, and evil drowned                        (sorrow et al are cliche)
and I could smile again when silver reflected the     (I try to not split articles between lines)
sun and it looked like love.
I could finally throw out the oiled saddle rippling into sand;
Free free free
from your chewy gristle never
to be ridden again.                    (strong ending: best 4 lines of the poem)

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So I am doing a project.  Basically I am in love with the dictionary and I go through and find a word.  This is a dictionary piece.

I hope my comments are helpful: I think this needs some revision, but overall it is solid and well-written, with some strong lines and contrasts.