03-25-2016, 08:15 AM
Hi Julius,
I like the minimalistic feel of the poem. I think you could go further in that direction (minimalism). You may want to get rid of the word somwhere; the assumptionis is we know where i.e. a church. Also as someone else has suggested put hatred, death and resurrection on a single line.
Thanks, Matt
I like the minimalistic feel of the poem. I think you could go further in that direction (minimalism). You may want to get rid of the word somwhere; the assumptionis is we know where i.e. a church. Also as someone else has suggested put hatred, death and resurrection on a single line.
Thanks, Matt