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03-23-2016, 07:02 AM
I thought this was a sweet poem. I think you should add "But" before "I know how to tell you this," for two reasons- I think it would better prepare the reader for the transition from "I don't know" to "I know," and it would keep consistency with the number of syllables from the previous stanzas. Also, I would choose another word for "feeling." I understood what you were saying, but it felt kind of jerky/awkward to me. Great poem!
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I don't know - by 1skylande1 - 02-22-2016, 08:03 PM
RE: I don't know - by Achebe - 02-23-2016, 08:36 PM
RE: I don't know - by escher - 02-26-2016, 08:12 AM
RE: I don't know - by 1skylande1 - 03-03-2016, 11:10 PM
RE: I don't know - by Enginee - 03-13-2016, 10:22 AM
RE: I don't know - by Sciencegeek - 03-23-2016, 07:02 AM
RE: I don't know - by Matthew McKeown - 03-25-2016, 08:29 AM
RE: I don't know - by Erthona - 03-25-2016, 08:55 AM
RE: I don't know - by Acephale - 03-26-2016, 04:07 AM
RE: I don't know - by astaroth - 03-30-2016, 12:40 PM
RE: I don't know - by Christy - 04-01-2016, 10:12 PM
RE: I don't know - by Jasper - 04-02-2016, 05:36 AM
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