Embers

[CholSerp]

Cholserp, hey,

Well at least I'm getting the jist of it across. I do think you're right about starting from scratch on this one. There are a few elements I'd like to harvest but based on the feedback this isn't working in a big way. You've given me some aspects to ponder. Thanks for the help,

- Matt

Glad I could help, Matt. So have you done any revision yet? What are you thinking? I'd love to see what you're going to do with the poem, which has lots of promise. 

In the meantime, I invite you to read and critique my poem "Routines: Poem 1." Here's the thread: http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-18531...#pid207016