I'm leaving you

[The Raven]

I'm leaving us my love,
my reckless entanglement,
my fucking mad, headlong descent
into today.
You swore we'd die entwined
in each other,
loving each other.
Give me a chance you said, I would take out this "you said", It just slows down the peice
to prove my love, you said. Now I would place this "you said' on the next line
you said.
Ha! you had me there,
I didn't ever see this coming,
This cold, this freezing cold,
I'd have taken hatred any day.
Didn't I deserve that,
at least that?
Didn't I, my love?

Other than that, this seems well written, like it truly comes from the heart