Sonnet IV

[Erthona]

Within do-ey (doe-eyed, or dowy) eyes and cord-ial-ly white jacks (This line cannot be saved as "doey" is not a word and the closes possibly words "doe-eyed", or "dowy" both start with the accent on the first syllable, throwing the meter off. Even if the original word, were a word, the accent would be on the first accent, so it would read:

With-in do-ey as the first syllable would be pronounced as "dou" or as the word "dowel" not as the word dough. Even doe-eyed is pronounced [doh-ahyd] (http://www.dictionary.com/browse/doe-eyed?s=t) so this still leaves a meter problem. As the second "eyes" could be removed, it would bring the syllable count down to ten , which is a dubious distinction. 

This comes closets to a Petrarchan sonnet, but the sestet should start where the word "last" is, but obviously does not. So this leaves me in a quandary. As I am unaware of what form this is in, it is impossible to critique the poem in any way further than I have.

manifests    a
 jacks         b
climax        b
breasts       a
chests        a
 lilacs           b
 backs        b
 rests         a
 last?         /b
sunlight      c
graves       d
 days         d
night         c
 saves       d

Is this supposed to be a  Petrarchan and simply a traffic jam in the sestet, or is this some form of sonnet I've never heard of? Without knowing I can offer nothing else. I am sorry I can be of no further help with this poem.

Best,

dale