I'm leaving you

[DerTomatenToaster]

I'm leaving us my love,
my reckless entanglement,
my fucking mad, headlong descent
into today.
You swore we'd die entwined
in each other,
loving each other.
Give me a chance you said,
to prove my love, you said.
Ha! you had me there,
I didn't ever see this coming,
This cold, this freezing cold,
I'd have taken hatred any day.
Didn't I deserve that,
at least that?
Didn't I, my love?

Ha, a breakup poem! My speciality... Probably.
But I have to admit I don't really like it. It's just the standard "You swore we'd be together forever, but you turned so cold" thing that everyone knows. And if that's what you want it to be, because that's how you feel or something, that's perfectly okay, but then you should at least try to do something special with it, add something that makes the reader think about it.

And even in the poem that isn't very poetic to begin with, you at least tried to use some fancy words at the beginning, which you also stopped with after a while, so you in the end only got some VERY weak lines at the end. Maybe I'm missing something important, if so I'm sorry.
After all, even if I criticized a lot: It's not bad. It's just not good, because there is nothing special to it.