Embers

[Tiger the Lion]

Hello Matt. I always wish posters would include their title above the body of the poem. I hate having to scroll up to remind myself of the title and double-check for significance. In this case, even more so because "3:00 AM" looks as though it could be the title. Not overly important, just a personal peeve. So...

Embers

3:00 AM colon here, if nothing else
too tired to know what raised me by the 2nd line I'm already wishing this was a more punctuated poem
these hallways carry a different kind of silence different than?
an old silence
a last vestige of those of have gone before those who
in the corridors of the mad

she was lost in a skewed space
he would follow, but for now why start punctuating now?
she was half dream, half ethereal
far too distant for me
to see past distant eyes, not sure about "distant" X2

then another, my feet were cold, his eyes barrage of commas seems sudden
were embers
an evil as ancient
as the spawning of Gods,
and I sleep

Just wanted to get you started. I'll be back after a few more reads and some more input.
Thanks for the read,
Paul