03-11-2016, 02:12 PM
Hi Paul,
I've been shuffling the lines in your poem and there are so many possibilities.
I like the way you've used the space so that 'another hour' stands alone; and could be seen as an extra hour.
I think the space also encourages the line shuffling that I mentioned. There's a lot in this poem for how short it is.
As an aside, nevermind lost an hour I thought I'd lost 2 weeks before I worked out that your clocks go forward earlier than ours.
Cheers for the read,
Mark
I've been shuffling the lines in your poem and there are so many possibilities.
I like the way you've used the space so that 'another hour' stands alone; and could be seen as an extra hour.
I think the space also encourages the line shuffling that I mentioned. There's a lot in this poem for how short it is.
As an aside, nevermind lost an hour I thought I'd lost 2 weeks before I worked out that your clocks go forward earlier than ours.
Cheers for the read,
Mark
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