Bloomer

[ephemerald]

i wasn't alluding to a deeper meaning: just the literal one. 
A good example is 'in visions of what's always been' - you do not explain what this what is, and the line  becomes you talking to yourself. Anither is 'beneath the tides' - what do tides have to do with your eyes? You need to connect your images through the poem, else it becomes a mush.
The evergreen (tree?)

Ah, I think that's a really good point for me to take; that I'm just talking to myself without bringing the reader fully in.  Admittedly, I've definitely been in this beginning stage of just writing for myself without paying mind to an outside interpretation. 

With "in visions of what's always been" I was hoping to portray some kind of sense of the moon hung in the sky as a kind of constant watcher of the events and happenings below.  With "behind my eyes and beneath the tides" I was making a parallel between the pull and affect (almost as some kind of possession) the moon having on both the earth and dreamer.  Obviously falling a bit short and becoming this "mush" you speak of.

Perhaps making the reference to trees in the first line "evergreens" instead of just "evergreen" would make more sense.  Separating species of tree from just some colour.

Hello,
I'm new to the site and I haven't much experience in critiquing poetry but I will give it a try. I really enjoyed this poem. Very nice imagery. Nice flow to the words. The feeling that I got from it was bittersweet. I was reminded of a time when I found comfort in the memory of a love that I had lost. The fourth stanza could be a little confusing given the juxtaposition of the night with the bright meadows but I interpreted it to be symbolic of the speaker's mindset or emotional predisposition in comparison with those around him as opposed to being indicative of the time of day. I may be way off. Either way I really enjoyed it. Thanks.

Thanks for commenting, I appreciate it!  And again, thanks for sharing what specifically came to mind from it through your reading.  Your interpretation of the night/day dichotomy as symbolic is closer to what I'd been attempting to elucidate, too. 

Oh, and hey, I'm new to the site as well!  Hope to read some of your writing, too .