Bloomer

[Achebe]

Hi - I found this to be too full of metaphors. Couldn't quite understand in the end what it was that you were saying. I also found your abandonment of "the" unsatisfactory. Good luck.

Hi Achebe, thanks for the comment. 

I don't really know if I'm trying to say anything, per se.  In that I mean - there's nothing that I'm getting to, necessarily.  It holds a lot of subjective meaning and from that has spurred the imagery and metaphor, though from the responses I've garnered it's clear that the layered metaphors are making it kind of murky to decipher anything from an impartial viewpoint.  The gist of it is, "I bloom by night."  But I decided against putting some variation of those exact words in there. 

Could you elaborate on my lack of "the" and the detriment caused?  Where should the the's be?

i wasn't alluding to a deeper meaning: just the literal one. 
A good example is 'in visions of what's always been' - you do not explain what this what is, and the line  becomes you talking to yourself. Anither is 'beneath the tides' - what do tides have to do with your eyes? You need to connect your images through the poem, else it becomes a mush.
The evergreen (tree?)