The Madness of Frogs

[Julius]

Hi,
I cannot not like this as I ,too, passed through a frog stage with "When frogs Collide" and "When Frogs Confide" a while back.
In terms of crit, I have to ask...why the line caps? It is retro and confusing, adds nothing to the quality of the piece and is more often than not a pseudo-poetic device.
The meter and form of the piece lends itself to the content in the same way that Comic font is good for Children's books...that is a compliment by the way.
"Their mouth..." is wrong. You know why.
The rhymes ARE forced but why not? You want it to rhyme to give it that "once upon a time/ nursery rhyme" feeling" Good.
Best,
tectak

Thank you for reading and your kind comments. I'll have to hop to it and read some of your "froggy" stuff
I know using line caps is frowned upon today, but I am getting on in age and it was de rigueur during my younger days. It's one of those things I sometimes do and sometimes don't
Now, the point of English, concerning "their mouth". Think of it as "All frogs have a wide mouth". Or "The species frog has a wide mouth". The example I remember from my school days is " The crowd was coming down the street".  That was the way I looked at it, perhaps wrongly?

Hello,
regarding "their mouth" In your contra-examples you are not relating to subject. The collective term "all" is as singular as, for example, "flock". So it is fine to say "All (frogs) have a wide mouth". You refer to "all". You cannot say, however, that  "frogs  have a wide mouth"...or rather, you can, but correctly "frogs have wide mouths". This is an old chestnut. To go backwards, it is "A flock"..no argument...so " A flock of sheep ran down the road" Yes? Or would you say "Sheeps ran down the road"? No. Thought not.
A small nit..who is complaining? Good egg.
Best,
tectak

I did give quite a lot of thought about "their mouth" when I wrote the poem, but on reflection "their mouth" is rather debatable but "their mouths" cannot be misunderstood. When I do an edit I think "their mouths" will find its place
Thank you for the advice and support,